Dasey fanfic by anti Daseyer??

ally6677 · Posted: Tue Oct 28, 2008 7:32 pm Post subject: Dasey fanfic by anti Daseyer??

OK, so I forced (more like asked nicely) my anti-Dasey sister to write a Dasey fanfic (after proving that Dasey exsists) and I found it good enough to edit and put on fanfiction (though it is under her name). Sadly she couldn't help but add her own anti-Dasey touch to the end though. Sad

So here it is (I'm too lazy to copy and paste the fic (which is really sad but oh well))

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4622513/1/Never_Meant_To_Be

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Shourai · Posted: Tue Oct 28, 2008 11:08 pm Post subject:

A suggestion, if I may... When having verbs like "walks", change them to past tense. It helps the flow of the story. Smile

(i.e. Walks = walked; come = came; says = said; etc.)

Also, there were some other grammatical mistakes...

...

Ignore me; I'm just a geek. XD
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ally6677 · Posted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 4:41 am Post subject:

^ That makes sense. I had to edit the story and the fact that she wrote it in present tense really bugged me as for grammer..... not really my best are of editing so I'm probably at fault there.....
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Shourai · Posted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 4:54 am Post subject:

Present tense is really bad for stories. >.< I'm not the best at grammar, either; but I do have what you could call a "grammar sense".

My grammar senses are tingling.

...

Sorry, I just couldn't resist. Cool

-Shourai

P.S. I could beta it, if you want... XD
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DaniLovesDasey · Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 12:09 pm Post subject:

Aside from a few grammatical errors, it's pretty good - especially for someone who isn't even a fan of the main focus of their own story lol. I could never write an unbiased Masey, Dally, Demily, or Trasey fanfic, even though your sister's bias was evident at the end of the story. lol

ally6677 · Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 12:22 pm Post subject:

^ I'd tell her of all the praise (and critism) but she doesn't really care, she only wrote it so I would stop annoying her about Dasey. I'm to blame for the grammer errors though, I was supposed to edit it better than I did but I was trying to get it out of the way but I blame the grammer check on my program for not fixing it.

So the next time I write anything for fanfiction, I'll read it over or get it betaed.
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Shourai · Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 12:35 pm Post subject:

^It's not that big of a deal. Plus, beta-readers are quite easy to find. Smile

ally6677 · Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 12:51 pm Post subject:

^ Nope, not hard to find at all. I wouldn't mind being a beta-reader but I'm the last person anyone should line up for the job. Most of my errors have to do with my messed up keys for my laptop (some of the keys need to be held down longer) and sometimes I type too fast (for myself, my typing is actually really slow) and miss a letter ect.

About the tense, I actually wrote one of my stories in present tense, though I hate the second chapter for it. I personally think that in third person, past tense is better and in first person, present tense can be better depending on how the story works out. Past tenss in first person can feel weird, like the narrator is just telling the story, in stead of experiencing it which I think is better. But Em decided against a narrator (well, she really made both Derek and Casey the narrators) and that is mostly why I don't like it.

Shourai · Posted: Mon Nov 03, 2008 4:34 am Post subject:

^ First person does need to be in present tense. If not, it my seem weird.

Though, I don't exactly like stories in first person...

ally6677 · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 7:42 pm Post subject:

somerdaye · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 8:42 pm Post subject:

^^ I could do any of those pairings. Cool

-feels spedshul-
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ally6677 · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 10:38 pm Post subject:

^ *bows* lol, I've already said that there are some I couldn't write about but it's nice that some people could.
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somerdaye · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 10:43 pm Post subject:

Yeah, I know.

I just seize any opportunity that lets me say the word "spedshul".
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ally6677 · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 10:56 pm Post subject:

lol, Somer you make me laugh!!
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somerdaye · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 11:24 pm Post subject:

That's my main goal in life! Very Happy

That, and get a bearhug from Michael Seater.
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