Dasey Nation

[Daseyluver100]

My first try at a fan-fiction... Although it has no title at the moment I eventually will think of a title. Constuctive critism is great... I know im not the best author and I can take critism. im just waiting for my fanfiction.net account to kick in then ill add it up there. Heres chapter 1.



Chapter 1:Sam's, Emily's, and Ralph's Relization

Casey's POV

It all started three days ago, when Emily approached me in the hallway at school. I was in a very bad mood seeing as I had just been in a HUGE fight with my step-brother Derek.
'Casey, can I talk to you for a minute,' Emily asked.
'Sure Em. What's up?', I asked.
Emily looked nervous as she paused thinking of the right words to say.
'Please don't get mad at me for asking this, but, how exactly do you feel about Derek?'
This question confused me. What did she mean, how did I feel about Derek. I hated him, at least I think I did.
'What do you mean?' I asked, trying to understand what she was saying. She looked down at her hands and started talking to her feet.
'What I mean is, do you love him?' She said the last part so fast I didn't quite hear her. I thought she had said do you love him, but that couldn't be it.
'Sorry Em, didn't quite catch that.'
'I said, do you love Derek?'
I stared at her with my mouth wide open. The bell signalling my te next period snapped me out of my reverie. 'Uh, I'll talk to you later Em,' and I ran to the guidance councellors office for my appointment, but turning the corner I...


Derek's POV

'I can't wait for this day to end,' I said to my friends Sam and Ralph, as I closed my locker and faced them. Sam was staring anywhere but at me, while Ralph looked like he was trying to remember something.
'Dudes, what's up,' I asked them.
'Oh nothing, just wanted to ask you something,' replied Sam, still not looking at me. I waited a minute to see if he would say anything,and when he didn't, I snapped my fingers in front of Ralphs face.
'Yo, Ralph. Any idea what Sam want's to ask me?'
He looked at me then at Sam. Out of the corner of my eye, I saw Sam shake his head and mouth the words let me.
Ralph looked back at me and said, 'Sorry man. No idea.'
Finally Sam spoke up.' Derek, do you like Casey?' I stared at him, and seeing my disbeleif, he repeated his question. 'Do you like Case--' The rest of his quetion was drowned out by the sound of the bell.
'Gotta get to class, don't want to be late,' I said nervously, and for the first time since I started high school, I actually wanted to get to class. I ran off toward my 4th period English class, and as I turned the corner I...


Nobodies POV

Casey and Derek both turned the corner at the same time. They ran into eachother, scattering their text-books everywhere.
'I am so sorry, I didn't...' Casey began apoligizing, but cut off when she looked up at the person she had collided into.
Hearing Casey's voice, Derek looked up startled. They stared into eachothers eyes, but were interupted by the sound of the door opening. Paul Greeby, the schools guidace councellor, was looking down at them. Casey stood up and started mumbling somthing about running into Derek on her way to her appointment.
Derek started gathering his and Casey's books in his arms. When he finished he stood up and handed Casey hers. He looked at Pual, said good-bye and walked away, stunned at the way his heart had started fluttering when he had stared into Casey's blue eyes. Little did he know, Casey was thinking the same thing. She had been mesmorized in his brown eyes, and never would have looked away if it weren't for Paul.

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Ashlee





Team Edward

[ally6677]

I like it but I coundn't help you with figuring out a title..... I'll leave that to the more creative people on DN unless you have one in mind already. I really loved it! And so amazingly Dasey!!! Of course I love it!! And Paul is is in it so it's already ot all the key points in a good fanfic story (Paul isn't a mst-have but he seems to improve some fics, but I love yours. Is this your first fanfic really? 'Cuz mine (which I am still finishing) sucks! Good job!

The only critism I have is that you spell check it and then read it over twice. It sounds hard and unfun but I find that it can improve the story and make it more apealing (i don't really know why though). But almost all of the story doesn't need to be checked for spelling and for that.. I compliment you!
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Chapter 2: The Mixed-Up Text-books

Casey's POV

'Paul, what if I told you I've been starting to have some feelings about someone that I can't have feelings for?' I asked the guidance councellor in front of me. Paul stared at me with a knowing expression on his face, which I didn't completly understand seeing as NO ONE
-except for Emily for some reason- knew that I liked Derek in more than a brotherly way.
'Depends on who your talking about. Like Derek for instince.'
I gasped and stared at him in shock. 'How do you know'
'Casey, it's pretty obvious. All the time your in here ranting about only one person.Derek. And everytime you talk about him you get this gleam in your eye. You would have to be blind AND deaf not to notice it.'
'Okay, so you know, but you still didn't answer my question.' I was annoyed at Paul for being so insightful but not helping me with my problem.
'Well maybe you just need to talk to him. If your parents find out, who cares, do what makes you feel happy.' Paul said.'And I think our meetings over. See you next week.'
'But you didn't really fix my problem' I protested.
'Didn't I' Paul said sarcastically.
'Your not going to fix my problem entirely,are you?'
'What do you think?' He said giving me a smile and a dismissive wave.
'Fine. See you next week.' I walked out of the room feeling grumpy and a little bit nervous.

Derek's POV

As I walked off to my next class, I couldn't help but look back at the door to Paul's office. I remembered the moment our eyes met and I felt giddy at the memory of it. But wait. I'm a guy. I'm not supposed to feel giddy. God Casey, look what you've reduced me to.
I shook that thought away as I walked into my english class, and sat down in my usual spot at the back of the room. I opened my text-book and gasped. Several people looked at me but I took no notice as I stared at the inside of CASEY'S book. I must've grabbed the wrong one by mistake in my hury to get away from her and Paul. I looked at the loopy letters surrouded by a heart in the inside cover. CASEY+DEREK. I was stunned and without asking permission gathered up my books -and Casey's- and walked out the door. I needed alone time. As I walked through the halls, I passed Sam and started walking faster.
'Hey D,' he called to me but I ignored him. He ran to catch up to me and asked me if i was alright. I guess I must've looked very happy, but a bit confused at the same time. I sure felt happy and confused.
'Ya, I'm fine' I snapped at him.
'Whoa, what's up with you?' he asked taking a step back.
'Nothing.'
'Did you think about my question.' He asked nervously. I guess he was afraid I would snap at him again. I took a deep breath and told him I hadn't, which was the truth 'cause I had completly forgotton about it after I had run into Casey.I smiled at the memory, but my thoughts were quickly interupted by Sam who was demanding an answer to his Do you like Casey question.
'I don't know Sam. All I know is that whenever I'm around her, I laugh louder, and when we're eating dinner or something, the food just tastes better. I can't describe it.' The words flowed out of my mouth before I could stop them. Sam was looking at me strangely and I was the one nervous now. Sam had known I had felt something for Casey before, but now, he knew it was something more.
'Wow. Now was that so hard.' Sam asked me.

Casey's POV

I got to my 5th period english class and sat in my ussual seat in the front row. I automatically looked at the seat in the very back. I had no clue why I always looked at that seat, I was just sort've drawn to it. I wonder who sits there in other classes.
I opened my text-book and almost screamed. My doodles weren't there which could only mean that Derek got our books switched in the hallway last period. He probably already saw the doodles. I put my head in my hands as I thought of what he probably did when he saw them. He probably laughed and showed the whole class what I had did. I started silently crying at embarassing thought. My teacher came up to me after seeing my shoulders shaking and told me I could skip class if I wasn't feeling well, and I wasn't. I started feeling sick the moment I had noticed the mix-up, and it didn't help matters that I was worried at what Derek had said or did when he found the doodles. I left the classroom and headed for my locker. I put all my books except the english text in my locker, and went to Derek's locker to give him back his book. On the way, butterflies formed in my stomach and my heart started fluttering for different reasons. The butterflies were from the emarassment that would never really come (though I didn't know it at the time), and the fluttering was from the thought of seeing Derek again.
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Team Edward

[ally6677]

Aww, and those antis say that Dasey isn't adorable, they are patetic! Casey doodles in her textbook about her and Derek???? That was so awesome I can't really express it well. And Derek liked what he saw!! can't wait for the next chapter!!
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[Daseyluver100]

thanks.... I'm still thinking of an idea for the next chapter. I wrote both chapters yesterday and for the moment im all out of ideas... by tomorrow i should have an idea though and start writing again
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Ashlee





Team Edward

[ally6677]

Don't worry, take your time and come up with something great for the next chapter. I, myself, haven't been known to be consistant with my stories.
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[Daseyluver100]

Im about halfway through the third chapter.
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